I am Alexander.
Cutting the first six chapters of Sometimes the Dragon was what I needed to do.
I've read the first 50 pages with Tenly and Toller, and they work. A simple love story, with threatening clouds forming in the background.
But, it works the way it should work. (And if you want more, you can read the Tales of Pox.)
This may not be as much rewriting as I thought -- barely any, so far. Of course, it will be a smaller book, but I'm not sure that should matter if the story comes together.
23 hours ago