Read the first 3 chapters of The Last Fedora at writer's group last night. They seemed to like it. Pointed out a couple of cliches: "deep wells" for eyes, and "soothing the savage beast."
They also thought the 10 year old character was way too precocious for the age. Easily fixed, actually. I can make him 12, 13, or even 14. I'm thinking 13 right now.
One of the readers hadn't heard of Golem's. I figure anyone who tracks down a book called, The Last Fedora: The Gangster Golem Chronicles, is going to know what a Golem is.
Back to the salt mines. Trying to get Tuskers III right. I always know I'm in trouble when I have to fiddle with the structure of a book. I don't know why this sometimes happens and sometimes doesn't. It doesn't really make the book better or worse -- just harder to write.
I had another brainstorm. Do it in 3 parts.
Z Day, Minus One.
A continuation of the characters from books I and II, with a heavy emphasis on a Tusker named Napoleon.
Z Day, Plus One.
The new characters and how some of them meet the characters from the first two books.
Z Day, Plus 523.
This is set a year and a half after the events in the first two parts. Bringing all the characters together in one final confrontation.
Z Day Plus One is more or less written.
I have a bunch of material that originally was going to be threaded through the story, but which will have to be rewritten as a separate Z Day Minus One.
Z Day Plus 523 will have to be written pretty much from scratch.
I'm going to do something different I think. I'm going to outline each of the first few chapters; be clear about what I'm trying to accomplish before I write them. Don't know if this will work, but I'm going to give it a try.
It is going to be a challenge to make the first part of the book work, but that's okay. I probably need a challenge.
But, damn. I wish they all came as easy as The Last Fedora or the first Tuskers book!
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