So I basically hired someone to give Faerylander a clean read -- and sure enough, she finds the problems that I knew in my heart of hearts that the novel still had.
Damn, Damn, Damn.
I think I might be able to fix it -- yet again. She suggested that I can introduce the danger by having the main character suffer an assassination attempt.
So I'm going to write a whole new chapter. A whole fucking new chapter, and try to insert it. It would be chapter 3, I guess.
I'm not sure if it is possible, but I'll give a whirl.
If THAT doesn't fix it, I done. Finished. Screw the whole thing.
No, I can't do that. There is a good book here, I'm convinced. I just need to keep working on it until it works.
In-between all the books that work without so much work.
3 days ago