I wrote the scene yesterday, then read it to Linda, who looked at me in bewilderment.
So as much as I like that response, it probably isn't a good one for the penultimate chapter. Heh.
I've built this whole story into a war between the worlds, but more importantly a war between good and evil. Using a tank is pretty reductive.
I think I can use some elements of this chapter, make the tank a red herring, but it probably shouldn't be moved front and center.
I'm going to sit down and write a completely new chapter without reference to this aborted one, and then take whatever elements I can save and use them.
I don't usually take such false steps but this could be a earlier chapter in a longer story -- there is a second book in this series, if I want there to be. But it might leave the ending to this book a little less than spectacular. I'm always annoyed when I watch a show and they have a natural conclusion that they obviously avoid in order to extend the story. It's a bit like cheating.
I still have four days to write the last two chapters, so I can work on it. Try to get it right.
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